That Perfect Point in Time

I write some stuff that could be classed as urban fantasy. (It’s not ready for prime time) But I made the trigger event be in 2016 and to my total dismay I discovered a perfect theme song for my lead… that came out about two years later. I cannot move the trigger event, and the world has changed so they can’t get it later when it really came out.

old metal gears

Crane Gears by Kevin Utting, attributed under Creative Commons 2.0

I would love having my lead use a lyric’s text to gird themselves as bad things go down. Everything is dark in my current chapter, and even taking heart is a good thing.

I will probably find a weaker song, or just have it on my playlist when I write for battle.

But it is a missed opportunity, because of a missed point in time…

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Cover Art

I finished a major revision of a novelette August. Can’t afford professional editing so I dawdled that month checking a couple sites for trade or betas, but nothing came of it. Then September was dedicated to a major illness and surgery of a close family member. Recovery is slower than I hoped, but I’m starting to have energy and time for my original writing again.

This story is very dark for me, and I believe Halloween is a better time for release. While betrayal and faith are themes, the ending has loss and can be taken as horror or slight hope.

demons by jeanieforever

demons by jeanieforever, creative commons attribution

My issue is that releasing it to Kindle/Createspace whatever they are today, will require cover art. I really am proud of cover art I made for some fanfic or NaNo placeholder, but I have no concept for this one. How will I try to visually represent false representation/slow change/demons/manipulation/svengali/demonseed/illusions/regaining agency? At points it looks like a romance, but through a warped mirror. (and that was a challenge to keep as I like happy endings usually)

Where is that thinking cap???

Awful Words

… No, this is not comments on the latest Potter fabfic, this is just on words. You, know, those little marks in pixels or ink we absorb every day.

Today I was reading a fiction piece that the author had must put out a revised chapter. I’m near the beginning. It opened with a little action, a murder, but this is a villain centered piece, so feeling for the victim is pointless. But that was not what yanked me out of the story,

It was the word ‘various.’  The story said ‘various sofas and seats’ like various said anything useful to establish the description of the room. Were they matching silk and quilted satin? were they Goodwill cast-offs?  Were they brand-new and tacky like a gaudy and cheap bordello?

Various is not a descriptive word.

It wastes space and ink better used for other words, words that set a mood, describe objects, or give some kind of counts.

Don’t use it.

 

I’ve got a bad feeling about this…

I’ve got a sibling who’s been sampling the joys of online dating. (but, no, not using known and more reputable ones) These sites are so effective at something, the prospective dates all ask for money before a date. The latest has chatted for 2-3 weeks. But a first meeting has been postponed twice and they are demanding that sibling say the “ILoveYou” before they meet face to face.

Being romantic, I believe you can fall in love without a F2F connection, but demanding that is just way too soon. Are they that messed up? (Misery– Get away!) or are they greedy, using that as a feeder to start extorting money from a lovesick target?

I really can’t think of anther reason to demand a declaration of love before you meet. Bueller?

Organizing My Thoughts

I write. Sometimes I write a lot. When my inspiration is running high, like during a NaNo challenge, I run 2000 draft words a day. That is a respectable pace, so I’m happy with that.  I used to do more before health issues interfered, but that 2k a day is as much as I can physically manage on a steady basis.

Some things, like most fanfic, I only do light editing or fill in missing facts, like the name of a specific space station in the setting.  Some fanfic requires more work to check on continuity in the 100k project. Fun stuff and parodies like a Gilligan’s Island piece go up faster.  But original work, especially heavy world-building make for a whole other kettle of fish. I feel fairly confident in my core ideas, my lead characters, and my overall plot. It’s the rest that I’m kind of wobbly on. I know theme and secondary characters are weaker.

So it’s revision for original works are my problem area, especially as I can’t afford an editor. So I want to have something top notch before I send them out.  A second opinion and noting brain-farts is more important than spelling and grammar at this point. Finding that honest opinion without giving away the cow is an issue. I have two original novel drafts, and I’m reluctant to start another novel until I figure out a better way to revise and finish those novels. I still want a thumbs up or down before I decide whether to seek a real publisher.

globe clear light bulb

old style light bulb, from pxhere

I’m still looking after ten years for a method better for editing than flailing about and running through a piece until the thought of one more pass makes me want more to shoot myself than look at it one more time. I’ve read articles and done classes, and I’m actually happy with a major revision I did last month. That is the exception, and the longer the work, the lower the confidence.

Sadly, several instructors I’ve found who seem compatable, are still in the 20th century, where piles of dead tree pages and huddling over a dining room table chaos is part of the writing package. People today, are more mobile, moving from place to place, and in between meals don’t have that luxury of spreading out and static resources.  Why can’t I apply digital analysis and tools to my work? This is organization and analysis if my work, not the raw rush of creation.  (Yes, I looked at Scrivener and yWriter but the latter just got in the way)  I want a tool that I can drop my finished draft in and let me organize and note things easily. Maybe  notice oopsies like the best friend only has 20 lines but a minor villain was featured for twenty pages.

I think something that lets me tag sentences, paragraphs and scenes with characters/roles/themes with checkboxes, and like a good modular code inherits from the higher level.  I may have to design my own database. It’s been a long time since my last and I am not looking forward to the timesuck. But I really want a better way to revise and work without scattered piles of dead tree pages.

Insights

I was reading a wikipedia entry on a book I virtually wore out as a teen (Gordon R Dickson’s Dorsai book Tactics of Mistake) and wishing I hadn’t misplaced my copy. (yeah, the electronic replacement copy is priced at least four times what I paid for the paperback that is missing)

As I read the entry I realized that I used the novel’s core concept in a fanfic I started writing three years ago. Are the Dorsai that different than the Fett clones? How long do concepts ferment in your mind before they come out to play?