Awful Words

… No, this is not comments on the latest Potter fabfic, this is just on words. You, know, those little marks in pixels or ink we absorb every day.

Today I was reading a fiction piece that the author had must put out a revised chapter. I’m near the beginning. It opened with a little action, a murder, but this is a villain centered piece, so feeling for the victim is pointless. But that was not what yanked me out of the story,

It was the word ‘various.’  The story said ‘various sofas and seats’ like various said anything useful to establish the description of the room. Were they matching silk and quilted satin? were they Goodwill cast-offs?  Were they brand-new and tacky like a gaudy and cheap bordello?

Various is not a descriptive word.

It wastes space and ink better used for other words, words that set a mood, describe objects, or give some kind of counts.

Don’t use it.

 

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